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(Visste inte om den platsade här egentligen, men i annat fall är det väl bara att flytta den!)

Jo, fallet är att jag ska lämna in en engelsk text på 300 ord om "My worst date ever" (min är högst påhittad). SÅ vad jag skulle vilja är att ni läser igenom texten noga och sen bombar på med vad jag borde ändra (grammatiskt och ordmässigt!)


Texten:


My worst date ever.

I don’t know if i even can call it a date, because we didn’t set any time or date or anything. It just happened.

It began the other day, I was out for a run when I’m suddenly dropped my VISA-card. I didn’t notice I dropped it, so I kept on running. But the guy right behind me noticed it and picked up and ran up beside and handed it back.
”Here you go!” he said.
”You dropped it.” he added when he saw my strange glance. He had that perfect smile they uses in toothpaste commercial and his eyes, blue and deep like oceans, looked straight into mine.
My legs turned in to jelly and I blushed a little. I thanked him and began to run again n unsteady legs, but the guy never left my side and after a little while he began to talk with me. He presented himself as Dave and he asked for my name. When I answered he complimented it and gave me his wonderful smile again.
”Do you wanna grab a cup of coffee?” he asked after about 20 metres of quiet running. I said yes and we went in to the closest Starbucks.
And for the next 2 hours we just sat there, drinking our coffee and talked. This guy was easy to talk with, he was funny to, and we had a great time. Then he remembered that he had a meeting in an hour and needed to go. He said he’d call me and ran out of the café.

It was first when I came home I realised that he didn’t have my number and I didn’t have his. I would maybe never see him again and the thought made me sad and i began to cry. That’s why this was my worst date ever.


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Tack på förhand!

Först och främst: sjukt bra text!!

Jag är ingen expert på engelska, och det var bara tre saker jag tänkte på.

I första meningen
"I don't know if i can call it a date...."
Ska "i" ´vara med stor bokstav - vilket du har gjort rätt på alla andra ställena.

På "began to run again n unsteady legs"
Där glömde du bara ett o. Det gör jag jätteofta när jag skriver på datorn!

Sedan: "He presented himself as..." där hade jag nog sagt "He introduced himself as..." men man kan nog säga båda

Jättebra! Tack så mycket!

Det var så lite!